"We need to leave right now!!!" Said Alex,But why?" Said Layla" I remember this man from when I was a little boy he came into my room and took me out of my bed. He took me away for ever and never brought me back."we should really be going" then I thought he was May dad but he wasn't my parents where looking everywhere for me but they didn't find me."so Layla do you think we need to leave ehh yes".
Oh dear, I can't see your picture of the man who took Alex away on my computer. I just get a little x. This starts well, but I think you got a bit tired towards the end. The grammar and spelling starts to go sloppy, making it difficult for the reader to understand. Maybe you should go over it one more time. You don't want to spoil your chances in the contest!
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