They turned around heard a piercing scream in distance.
"We can't go back, we'll get killed"
There were soon footsteps coming both ways
"Where should we go we're TRAPPED!!!" They cried. There was a cry of a little girl.Rhys & Cassidy ran to see if they could help, they found a dark room so they bravely walked in. They peired their heads round the wall and saw a shadow of a young girl tied to a chair, they ran in to help the young girl, at the creek of a floor board a cage tumbled upon them "It's a TRAP"
HI Seren,
ReplyDeleteGreat entry this week. You have used some fantastic descriptive language and have really built up a feeling of suspense. I also really liked your ending because the stop could either stop or it could continue.
Just review how to punctuate your quotation marks with your teacher. Otherwise, an excellent piece of writing.