As he Walked away from then window I felt terrified.I said we have to go ok let's go all of a sudden the door opened I am coming for you David it is your turn to suffer let's go Tim we need to go and find a way out the gates Shut oh no "HELP US" he killed all my family we claimed over the gat and ran in to a alway and we hid behind a I think he has goon then he said "I WILL FIND YOU"oh
no we are dead meet new grabbed us took us away.
Hi Jack,
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you included aspects of the prompt, so your story really did feel like it was carrying on the story. It was very exciting, but a little hard to follow because there are no full stops. If you separate your work into sentences it makes it much easier for the reader. I thoroughly enjoyed your story though- very exciting!
Fiona (Team 100WC)
Jack, you need to add Full Stops!
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